Hi, this is Michael. Great job. Here are a few corrections. The changes are in ´´quotes.´´
at 0:10 joints, not joins A warm up is a series of muscles and ´´joint´´ exercises ´´are made´´ before a ´´sport. It is used to...´´
0:30 ´´The joints´´ and movements are:
1:03 Shoulders rotation (´´forwards and backwards´´)
1:15 ´´Wrist´´ rotation
1:30 It consists ´´to work´´ our body...
1:49 doing ´´any kind of work better´´
3:30 dead, not died
4:31 Do you mean points instead of pints?
I really liked the music! There were a few spelling mistakes. I recommend that you run what you type in a program set to English, like word pad, or microsoft Word, first. It will correct spelling mistakes for you and sometimes grammar mistakes as well. Great job.
This is Michael. Good job. Changes are in ´´quotes.´´
0:09 A warm up is a series of muscles and ´´joint´´ exercises that is ´´made´´ before a sport that are used to prevent ´´injuries´´ and have a better performance.
It is not ´´Join movility´´, it is ´´Joint Mobility.
0:50 Open and ´´closed´´ hips
0:54 Waist rotation
1:04 (forwards and backwards)
1:27 It consists ´´of working´´ our body systems, such as...
1:48 Doing ´´any kind of work better´´
Sidewards is not a word, it´s ´´sideways´´
2:52 ...finish the warm up, such ´´as´´...
3:18 The killer with´´a´´ ball
3:23 When he gets you, you´re ´´dead.´´ ...in the same place ´´that´´ he ´´got you.
There are some other mistakes with grammar in your game descriptions. You need to read you´re sentences outloud and change whatever doesn´t sound or look right.
Hi, this is Michael. Great job. Here are a few corrections. The changes are in ´´quotes.´´
ResponderEliminarat 0:10
joints, not joins
A warm up is a series of muscles and ´´joint´´ exercises ´´are made´´ before a ´´sport. It is used to...´´
0:30
´´The joints´´ and movements are:
1:03
Shoulders rotation (´´forwards and backwards´´)
1:15
´´Wrist´´ rotation
1:30
It consists ´´to work´´ our body...
1:49
doing ´´any kind of work better´´
3:30
dead, not died
4:31
Do you mean points instead of pints?
I really liked the music! There were a few spelling mistakes. I recommend that you run what you type in a program set to English, like word pad, or microsoft Word, first. It will correct spelling mistakes for you and sometimes grammar mistakes as well. Great job.
This is Michael. Good job. Changes are in ´´quotes.´´
ResponderEliminar0:09
A warm up is a series of muscles and ´´joint´´ exercises that is ´´made´´ before a sport that are used to prevent ´´injuries´´ and have a better performance.
It is not ´´Join movility´´, it is ´´Joint Mobility.
0:50
Open and ´´closed´´ hips
0:54
Waist rotation
1:04
(forwards and backwards)
1:27
It consists ´´of working´´ our body systems, such as...
1:48
Doing ´´any kind of work better´´
Sidewards is not a word, it´s ´´sideways´´
2:52
...finish the warm up, such ´´as´´...
3:18
The killer with´´a´´ ball
3:23
When he gets you, you´re ´´dead.´´
...in the same place ´´that´´ he ´´got you.
There are some other mistakes with grammar in your game descriptions. You need to read you´re sentences outloud and change whatever doesn´t sound or look right.
Hey this is Michael. Good job. Here are some mistakes you have made.
ResponderEliminarjoints, not joins.
0:10
...a series of muscles and ´´joints´´ exercises that ´´are made´´ before a sport...
0:20
´´Joint Mobility´´ not join movility
It is always ´´JOINT´´ and it is always ´´MOBILITY´´
1:04
´´forwards´´
´´backwards´´
1:15
´´wrist´´ rotation
1:31
It consists in ´´working´´ our body systems, such as...
1:49
...doing ´´any kind of work better...´´
Sideways not sidewards
3:03
...everyone ´´has´´ to join...
3:23
change you´re ´´died´´ to ´´you´re ´dead´´´ or ´´you´ve ´died´´´
4:32
...you get ´´to the points´´ you ´´decided on´´ (such ´´as´´ 5,7,9,11...)